I’m on a break from my ongoing work on my ongoing Phantom trilogy, and have turned back to the Beauty and the Beast novella I co-wrote with several writer friends. It happened that I wrote my two (early in the book) chapters before the rest wrote theirs. Which was fine for all plot purposes, because we had a good outline, but it means none of their characters had been created yet. (It probably also gave an opportunity for prominence to Archambault, my footman-turned-coat rack who’s running around the castle with a feathered hat and a pink fur coat, but that’s a different point entirely…)
Now that I’m revising and we’re working on tying our respective chapters more closely together, I’m trying to get more characters into these early chapters. Mostly just a glimpse, partially because my chapter one POV character really doesn’t care about any of them (she’s like that)–but it’s been fun working in those glimpses.
Here’s an excerpt, including no less than seven characters (plus music being played by three others), who will all have their moments of importance as the story goes on.
“Now then,” I said once I was inside. I shook snow off my cloak and looked over the two footmen standing in the hallway—both quite common fellows, one with long stringy hair and the other young, with freckles and very big eyes. I do like how impressed common folk get. As they should. I pointed a long bony finger at the impressed footman. “Where can I find your prince?”
He stammered for a moment, then blurted, “…in the ballroom?”