I wrote recently about my research into the Paris police of the 1880s. I’m working on that strand of my novel right now, building up the role of Commissaire Mifroid. He’s actually one of my point of view characters, in a way. There are times when I want the reader to know something that Meg and the Phantom do not, so I included excerpts from Mifroid’s notebook.
Despite having that in place, I still didn’t have him prominent enough throughout the second book in earlier drafts, and didn’t have enough detail on his investigation. So today’s excerpt is an excerpt 😉 from Mifroid’s notebook–the first one that appears in the novel, in fact, which I have greatly expanded since previous versions.
Excerpt from the Private Notebook of Jean Mifroid, Commissaire of Police
10 Mar 1881
Continuing investigation into disappearance of Philippe de Chagny, Raoul de Chagny, Christine Daaé. Second interview of de Chagny housekeeper on 9 Mar, confessed to seeing RdC and CD on morning of 2 Mar. Last known sighting of RdC and CD. Expressed plans to leave country, consistent with letter received by M. Giry. Still tracing leads re: travel, current whereabouts.
Housekeeper provided no further info re: PdC. No additional sightings after evening of 1 Mar, at Opera Garnier. If abducted, no ransom. Murder?
RdC – Motive: inheritance? Interference with proposed marriage to CD? Opportunity: Last seen by myself seeking PdC at Opera, emotional state extreme at time. Capability: Possible, with weapon.
CD – Motive: Same as RdC. Opportunity: Also at Opera at time of PdC disappearance. Capability: Slight physical strength, unknown ability with weapons.
Cloaked man seen with PdC on stage – so-called Opera Ghost? – Motive: Unknown. Opportunity: Likely. Capability: Unknown.
Also continuing investigation into fallen chandelier. Evidence points to sabotage. Connection between sabotage and disappearance of PdC? Connection to long-standing legend of Opera Ghost?
2 thoughts on “Writing Wednesday: Police Plots”
I like how you write this in police style jargon and phrases instead of flowing sentences. Makes it more authentic.
Love all the questions!