I did heavy revisions on another scene for my Phantom novel today. Like some I revised a few weeks ago, I wrote this one early in the process of writing the trilogy, although I’ve been able to keep most of it as it was.
Even after years of working with these characters, they still surprise me sometimes. In this scene, Erik and Meg have the kind of argument that starts about one thing and turns into something else, and probably is really about a third thing entirely. The funny part is, I don’t think I properly realized until I revised it this week that it’s actually about trust. At least, that’s a bigger part of it than I realized–along with two or three other things!
As I reworked the scene, some of the original lines of dialogue just didn’t ring right anymore…and pretty soon Meg was coming out with new things I hadn’t quite known frustrated her.
Erik, obviously, was even more unaware than I was.
Here’s an excerpt. 🙂
“Did you trust Christine?” I demanded, a question I had never dared even think let alone ask, but that I had always, always wanted to know. “More than you trust me? Because you obviously don’t trust me. Not enough to tell me your plan when the mob was coming, or to tell me you were still alive, or to believe the best of me when you overheard something that sounded bad. You’ve never even told me what happened when Christine left, and I trust you enough to ignore all the stories saying you killed her!”
“Stop saying her name!”
That was the important part in what I had said? That was the only part he heard? Anger that had started red hot had turned into a cold fury that was even harder to control. “I am not Christine,” I said, my voice seeming to come from outside of myself, even and steady. “I don’t sing like Christine, and I’m not as beautiful as Christine, and I would never betray you like Christine.”